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okay, so here are some lyrics i have written.



now, im sure there is a topic on here somewhere that you can post your lyrics on, and i would like it to be stated that i am in NO WAY disrespecting that topic or SF for that matter, and that im NOT trying to be some spasmodic jerk creating a new topic just to be a jerk, but this is different:



1) these lyrics are special to me for 1. ive never written songs before. 2. its for the book im writing
2) i actually want YOU to comment about them and tell me stuff you think i should change. stuff that i should of done or shouldn't of done


i had more to say, but i forgot it now......


its funny where i came up with these lyrics.....at a NASCAR race....strangest place......



um, these lyrics probly wont make sense unless you read my book, so.....you can either read the book (please?) or you can just read the lyrics.....

i should have these to music soon (as soon as school will let sit down long enough and write the music for it)


anyway, here they are:



Chorus:

I'd give anything, anything to have been there
And I'd give anything, anything to have been there
If you were here, I'd hope you'd feel the same
But it's just me, wondering what could have been

Verse 1:

I held you close
Said I'd never let you go
Yet here am I
Without you
Without you

Bridge:

I'd take a bullet anyday for you
But how could I when I couldn't see it coming?
Coming
Coming (Chorus)

Verse 2:

I held you close
Said I'd protect you
That you were safe in my arms
But some things are out of our control
And how I wish that they weren't (Bridge, Chorus)

Tag:

I sit here
Wondering
What coulda
Or shoulda
Or woulda
Happened
If I had been there (Chorus 2, very softly)

Chorus 2:

I'd give anything, anything to have you here
And I'd give anything, anything to have you here
But you are there, and I hope you feel the same
That you were here with me (Chorus 2x, 1st time Mp, 2nd time F, then to ending)

Ending:

But it's just me, wondering what could have been.



so, what did you think?



and no laughing allowed. this came from 2 very broken hearts....

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eragon dies lonely, saphira cries acidic tears on thorn who dies, and as he is dying accidentally claws murtagh to death, whose sword shoots out and stabs arya, who dies and curses "brisingr" as she's dying, accidentally setting islanzadi on fire, who curses galby, who dies, and shruikan dies of a heart attack from the shock of all, and ants rule the world! then termites eat the ants and termites rule the world!


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August 25th, 2008, 8:43 pm
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Wow, they're really good, SJ! Though they are sad. I don't think there's anything that you really need to change; they're great as it is. Have you written the music for them yet?

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Agreed. They sound really deep and meaningful. But in Verse 1, did you mean to write, "Yet here I am" instead of "Yet here am I"? Other than that it's great, man. :)

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I think he meant to write that on purpose, but Idk lol. I know that those lyrics are true and straight from the heart, SJ, and that's why they're so good; they're sincere and meaningful.

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Post Re: Special Lyrics
wow, thanx for your comments!!!!




@Avatar: yeah, i meant to write it like that.....i dont rly know why...i guess i just thought it sounded better that way.....


@Toph: no, i havent written them to music yet.....im working sooooooo hard on it, but im not getting much time with school and stuff. and its so hard to write music to lyrics.....i mean, ive written my own music before, but with no lyrics, and thats easy, cuz you can do whatever you want with the music and it makes no difference. but actually writing a song that sounds like the lyrics is.....hard.

or i know how to put music to just chords, but i dont have any chords for this.....


so, do any of you know how to put music to lyrics?

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i've decided to keep this section open for my last everyone dies schemes:

eragon dies lonely, saphira cries acidic tears on thorn who dies, and as he is dying accidentally claws murtagh to death, whose sword shoots out and stabs arya, who dies and curses "brisingr" as she's dying, accidentally setting islanzadi on fire, who curses galby, who dies, and shruikan dies of a heart attack from the shock of all, and ants rule the world! then termites eat the ants and termites rule the world!


this is it...===> viewtopic.php?f=61&t=7823


August 27th, 2008, 8:04 pm
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Sorry, I've never tried writing music or lyrics or anything, I didn't know how hard it is....Unfortunately, I can't be of much help with that, sorry. So, uhhmm...just keep....trying? And eventually you'll....have some music to go with those lyrics! Do you have an idea for even a tune that the lyrics could go along with?

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August 27th, 2008, 8:14 pm
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yeah, i have the tune.....i just cant find the notes that correspond with them on the piano.....

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i've decided to keep this section open for my last everyone dies schemes:

eragon dies lonely, saphira cries acidic tears on thorn who dies, and as he is dying accidentally claws murtagh to death, whose sword shoots out and stabs arya, who dies and curses "brisingr" as she's dying, accidentally setting islanzadi on fire, who curses galby, who dies, and shruikan dies of a heart attack from the shock of all, and ants rule the world! then termites eat the ants and termites rule the world!


this is it...===> viewtopic.php?f=61&t=7823


August 27th, 2008, 8:16 pm
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Oh. Well, I guess if you keep playing notes on the piano, you'll eventually find the ones that sound right. And then you can try to play the tune in time with the lyrics...

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Post Re: Special Lyrics
Theyre wonderful sj. Now for the music, you need to find your tune. How do the words flow off your tongue? Ask yourself questions like those and you'll find the notes. Especially if its on a piano.

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August 27th, 2008, 8:45 pm
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Post Re: Special Lyrics
oh, yeah. i had the tune when i first started writing them (at a NASCAR race.....lol, that still cracks me up).....




i wish there was a way i could show yall how i sing it (even though im a very very terrible singer.....haha.) and then maybe somehow somebody could tell me like what the music is or something......cuz im very inexperienced with lyrics.....like i said, ive written just reg. music before, but not lyrics and music......

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i've decided to keep this section open for my last everyone dies schemes:

eragon dies lonely, saphira cries acidic tears on thorn who dies, and as he is dying accidentally claws murtagh to death, whose sword shoots out and stabs arya, who dies and curses "brisingr" as she's dying, accidentally setting islanzadi on fire, who curses galby, who dies, and shruikan dies of a heart attack from the shock of all, and ants rule the world! then termites eat the ants and termites rule the world!


this is it...===> viewtopic.php?f=61&t=7823


August 27th, 2008, 9:31 pm
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Well, all I can say is try to remember the tune you had in your mind, and then get creative with it. Make it more advanced. Try to add more sounds to fit the beat, because that way it'll be more interesting.

I'm not very experienced either. I'm more of a music listener that music creator. :lol: But keep in mind that it's your song and you can do whatever you want with it.

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yeah, thanx......well, im still tryin', but its hard with school and everything.....

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i've decided to keep this section open for my last everyone dies schemes:

eragon dies lonely, saphira cries acidic tears on thorn who dies, and as he is dying accidentally claws murtagh to death, whose sword shoots out and stabs arya, who dies and curses "brisingr" as she's dying, accidentally setting islanzadi on fire, who curses galby, who dies, and shruikan dies of a heart attack from the shock of all, and ants rule the world! then termites eat the ants and termites rule the world!


this is it...===> viewtopic.php?f=61&t=7823


August 28th, 2008, 3:29 pm
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Yeah... I hate that. I guess you just need to set up a schedule for yourself. You're free on the weekends, right?

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August 28th, 2008, 3:34 pm
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not rly.....i teach some kids piano on saturdays, and then sometimes i perform stuff on sundays.....

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i've decided to keep this section open for my last everyone dies schemes:

eragon dies lonely, saphira cries acidic tears on thorn who dies, and as he is dying accidentally claws murtagh to death, whose sword shoots out and stabs arya, who dies and curses "brisingr" as she's dying, accidentally setting islanzadi on fire, who curses galby, who dies, and shruikan dies of a heart attack from the shock of all, and ants rule the world! then termites eat the ants and termites rule the world!


this is it...===> viewtopic.php?f=61&t=7823


August 28th, 2008, 4:05 pm
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Hmm.. sorry, all I can say is try to fix a schedule for yourself that gives you time to work on it.

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